I am a Year 6 student at papakura central school School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room Khh and my teacher is Whaea Tamzin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Awesome work this week. I like how you completed the food pyramid by using photos and words. I also like your healthy plate and I can tell you have a good understanding of the food groups. Do you think ice cream is also considered a sometimes food? I think your writing this week is good. You have used some great ideas to make it interesting such as farmers using meat to feed animals so it does not go to waste. However, there are a few spelling errors and you have not quite met your R.T because you haven't described the characters in your story other than them being farmers. Next time maybe you can share your writing with me and I can help you edit your work.
Kia ora Hayley,
ReplyDeleteAwesome work this week. I like how you completed the food pyramid by using photos and words. I also like your healthy plate and I can tell you have a good understanding of the food groups. Do you think ice cream is also considered a sometimes food?
I think your writing this week is good. You have used some great ideas to make it interesting such as farmers using meat to feed animals so it does not go to waste. However, there are a few spelling errors and you have not quite met your R.T because you haven't described the characters in your story other than them being farmers. Next time maybe you can share your writing with me and I can help you edit your work.