I am a Year 6 student at papakura central school School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room Khh and my teacher is Whaea Tamzin. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Nice work Hayley! Next time for the maths questions, could you please show your working out. It is great you wrote down the answers but we also what to see the maths thinking behind these answers. I like how you created a mini beast which was made from two different animals merging together. I think it is a great idea that your mini beast eats animals that are a threat to our native birds. I bet they would be a big help! Maybe next time you could add a bit more description about your mini beast. This could include what its fur feels like, what kind of sounds it makes and if it has any predators.
I like how your writing was split into paragraphs so it was easy to read. I thought it was great that you included some of the good things about the monkey fish, such as how it eats animals that are a threat to our native species. I did notice there were a few errors in your writing and some of the "I" in your writing were lowercase instead of capitals. If you want, you can always share your writing with me and I can help you edit your work.
Nice work Hayley!
ReplyDeleteNext time for the maths questions, could you please show your working out. It is great you wrote down the answers but we also what to see the maths thinking behind these answers.
I like how you created a mini beast which was made from two different animals merging together. I think it is a great idea that your mini beast eats animals that are a threat to our native birds. I bet they would be a big help! Maybe next time you could add a bit more description about your mini beast. This could include what its fur feels like, what kind of sounds it makes and if it has any predators.
I like how your writing was split into paragraphs so it was easy to read. I thought it was great that you included some of the good things about the monkey fish, such as how it eats animals that are a threat to our native species. I did notice there were a few errors in your writing and some of the "I" in your writing were lowercase instead of capitals. If you want, you can always share your writing with me and I can help you edit your work.